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J.S.:
So, schnell am Bahnhof gewesen und mir auch ne Ausgabe gesichert (für 4,95). Erster Eindruck ist schon mal sehr gut, insbesondere die Tutorials und die Figuren Vergleiche vielen mir sofort in Auge  :thumbup:

WSS_Jasper:
Glad to hear that, but suggestions for improvement are always welcome too!

Jasper

J.S.:
Alright then, having spent the evening closer srutinizing your magazine, here\'s my verdict. As already mentioned I really like the reviews and the figure and rule comparisons. For several reasons, the articles themselves are unfortunatelly a different matter. First of all their quality differs quite a lot, the \"tactics of the civil war\" article representing the bottom level both content- and language wise. The line between writing in a clear, understandable way and sounding like a 3rd grader is a very thin one and in this particular article it definitely went wrong. The combination of far too many one liners and far too few sub ordinate clauses, conjuntions or any other means which give a text some cohesion creates a very unpleasant read.
Also  on page 48 (to name just one further example): \"Simílar to the 2nd Generation line, the drummer boys are sculped to look like boys and not like men. It is a very nice touch.\"
Why two sentences? [...], giving the miniatures a very nice touch / ,adding a nice touch to the figures/ ,which is a very nice touch. ec would have been more elegant solutions.
I know I sound like a nagger here, but you asked for some honest criticism  ;)
Summa Summarum: good ideas, partly mediocre realization; nevertheless, I\'m looking forward to future issues.

Ursus Maior:

--- Zitat von: \'J.S.\',index.php?page=Thread&postID=94992#post94992 ---Also  on page 48 (to name just one further example): \"Simílar to the 2nd Generation line, the drummer boys are sculped to look like boys and not like men. It is a very nice touch.\"
Why two sentences? [...], giving the miniatures a very nice touch / ,adding a nice touch to the figures/ ,which is a very nice touch. ec would have been more elegant solutions.
--- Ende Zitat ---

J.S., in all honesty, putting one subclause after anothre is very German. Not that I would have written the sentence in the same way, but making this two sentences is perfectly okay. In fact, it is something teachers try to teach German students, since they often lack the ability to make a point. Literally... Besides, even if suggestions are welcome, calling a third person a 3rd grader, is not respectful. Especially when he writes in a language that is not your mother tongue. Sorry to say so.

WSS_Jasper:
It\'s perfectly alright to give your opinion J.S., we put a magazine out there, which means we\'ve got to be able to take criticism. If it helps us to improve the mag, only better. Besides, I\'m Dutch and according to our reputation, I ought to take as well as I can give!  :sm_pirate_lol:

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