J.S., in all honesty, putting one subclause after anothre is very German.
So is it? As luck would have it, i\'ve got a pile of WI issues on my desk and here\'s an aribtrary example from the next best copy at hand:
There were 40,000 British troops now occupying little more than a few coastal cities and towns, and the royal navy was stretched almost to breaking trying to supply them while fending off French fleets from the English Channel to the West Indies. Moreover, the territory inland was lost to the British and there seemed little hope of turning that around, at least in the northern colonies. (WI 1265, p. 10)
According to your theory it should rather read like this:
There were 40,000 British troops now occupying little more than afew coastal cities and towns. The royal navy was stretched almost to breaking. It tried to supply them while fending off French fleets from the English Channel to the West Indies. The territory inland was lost to the British. There seemed little hope of turning that around, at least in the northern colonies.If this sounds ok to you- fine. I personally prefer the first version. You should keep in mind that we aren\'t dealing with a blog entry or a free-of-charge pdf. download, but content I payed for (the \"Tactics of the Civil war\" article is even promoted on the cover page..);therefore, comparisons with you pupils at school are not really appropriate here.
And hey..if that\'s my major point of critique, the WSS mag can\'t be too bad. The rest is really perfectly fine
